Good attempt for a 1st time
If its for a 'dance' beat.. you need to keep the beat going especially the kick drum and bass. The sudden stops here and there kind of kills it
It needs more changes.. dynamics and like just.. more. It just repeats the same Euroarp/hithat/kick/ over and over..
the Euroarp and the intro bass-ish effect makes it sound a little 'dark' so i guess it could be like a club-dance-ish kind of song. yeah
well good for your 1st try.